雅思小作文：考官給的若干意見
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小編： 81
環球教育寫作主講：王姝
【主講】雅思寫作
【特色】教學風格：靠譜，干貨多，效率高，責任心強。教學思路：讓考官的范文指路，告別慘淡，走出迷宮，使學生找到方向，并舉一反三!
【經歷】從事一線英語教育7年，從事雅思教育6年，改過兩萬多篇作文，曾游學歐洲四國，和兩位雅思考官深度交流，期待自己可以幫助到兩萬雅思考生。近期出版一書，即將與考生見面。
關鍵詞：雅思、小作文、感悟、趨勢、數據
近期，和雅思考官交流了一下，發現了以前的誤區，也發現了在小作文方面的很多可以挖掘的細節。和大家分享三個感悟。
感悟一：在開頭要會說不同的圖叫什么，越詳細的名字越好，這樣讓考官對你刮目一下。
感悟二：關于小作文的具體寫法(請嚴格遵照下面的權威寫法介紹)，一定要描述趨勢(我經常在上課的時候把‘趨勢’命名為圖的‘靈魂’。)
Most graphs will have two trends, or there will be two graphs with a trend in each. You could tell about the two trends in two separate paragraphs. Make sure you have identified the trends in the graph.
開頭段：
Introduction
第一句話：描述表格
• First sentence: Describe the graph. You can use some slightly different words or word forms from those on the question paper, but be careful to give the full information. Start "The graph shows"
第二句話：描述趨勢
• Second sentence: This gives the trend or trends. You can put two trends in this sentence or only one - you could keep the other one for the conclusion. Start "Overall, ..."
分論點第一段：趨勢一
第一句一定要描述趨勢(這句不需要加數據)，第二句再跟上例子(這句必須加上數據)
Paragraph 1: Trend 1
• Start with a sentence with no number. “City size increased sharply over the period.” “The most obvious trend in the graph is that women are having fewer babies.” “Oil production has increased slightly in all the countries in the graph”
• Follow this sentence with an example (sentence with number) and perhaps another example (another sentence with number). Keep alternating.
分論點第二段：趨勢二
第一句一定要描述趨勢(這句不需要加數據)，第二句再跟上例子(這句必須加上數據)
Paragraph 2: Trend 2
• Start with a sentence with no number. “City size increased sharply over the period.”
• Give an example (sentence with number) and perhaps another example
總結：換一下詞重復說一下圖中的趨勢(不必使用數據，不必加入主觀想法)
Conclusion
• Finish by repeating the main trends, or identify a second trend. Use different vocabulary.
• Don't have any numbers in the conclusion (you could use words like "most", "the majority" "a minority", "a small number").
• Don’t give an opinion.
感悟三，有些不必要做的請遠離。
• 不必描述橫縱軸，給出信息即可。
• 不必每個數據都提到，抓大放小。
• 數據的變化說具體一些，不要說“The line went up,” “The bar went down.”，而要說真實的數據如“The number of people going to work by train increased gradually.” “Oil production shot up in 1965”
• 不要說“I feel”, “as I have written,” “as you can see,”，要有學術范兒。
• 不要用‘But, So, Also, And, For, Since, Because, Although’放句首。
While You Write: Some Don’ts
• Don’t describe the X and Y axis. Give the information.
• Don’t write about everything on the graph. Pick the biggest, the smallest, the main points, the main trends. Group similar things together
• Don’t write about the line or the bar: “The line went up,” “The bar went down.” Instead, write about the idea. “The number of people going to work by train increased gradually.” “Oil production shot up in 1965”
• Make sure you write about the idea. Don’t use shorthand: “Men went up.” “Women went down.” Instead, write about the real data: “The number of men at university fell dramatically,” “The percentage of female students getting a degree rose suddenly.”
• Don’t use “I feel”, “as I have written,” “as you can see,” etc. Keep it academic.
• Don’t start sentences with But, So, Also, And, For, Since, Because, Although
